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  • Reply to blog post: No, I Don't Want a Ride in Your Tinted Window Van by clairemw
    Comment written 1 years ago
    This was exciting stuff up to: "Oh no thank you, I'm fine." He smiled and drove away, I continued my phone conversation."

    I wanted some great idiotic moment like in Blue Velvet when Kyle MacClachlan's character says "That's for me to know and you to find out".

    "Claire, today seems like the perfect day to turn into a complete and total idiot!"--You built up the sense of drama towards actually going in the truck with this apparently weird guy, but then you backed out. I imagine every reader wanted to be taken somewhere they'd never been. It all depends where you want to go with your writing, but the way you portrayed the kerb crawler was so good I really wanted you to carry on in control, and find out about this man. Very skillful stuff.. [THUMBUP]
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    Comment written 1 years ago
    Flea bites - calomine lotion!
  • Reply to blog post: Missing My Mother by clairemw
    Comment written 1 years ago
    It's strange how we're not allowed to express sadness. Great writing. [SAD]
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    Comment written 1 years ago
    Search me. I can't even use italics. [OHMY]
  • Reply to blog post: Experiment6 by eolevsky
    Comment written 1 years ago
    Hey! Very nice and creative.[THUMBUP]
  • Reply to blog post: Knotty Pine by centurion
    Comment written 1 years ago
    Nice haiku pivotting on the whorls. There's a lot of alliteration on double u. Whorls and wall sound very similar. I can really picture this though. [THUMBUP]
  • Reply to blog post: by
    Comment written 1 years ago
    Is that some kind of poem? [WINK]
  • Reply to blog post: The Courage by inspirations
    Comment written 1 years ago
    Hey, this is good. I like:

    "Mind is without expression
    All facts are buried"

    You don't need "In suppression" because you already said "buried." "All facts are buried" full stop.

    "Sun" shouldn't have a leading capital.

    "Only to make a wishful return." is weak. What is returning? The sun's rays reflected back at the sun. And it is repeated.

    But very good.
    [THUMBUP][THUMBUP]
  • Reply to blog post: Real Prose is Hard! by inspirations
    Comment written 1 years ago
    Yes, writerscafe.org, writing.com, and writewords.org.uk (expensive!), but there are thousands.
  • Reply to blog post: Xing.com by lynnette
    Comment written 1 years ago
    I see xing urls fly past all the time, and I wondered what it was all about. I'll take a look. Thanks [THUMBUP]

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